http://bunkbrain.wordpress.com/2006/03/28/poem/ Just another WordPress.com weblog Tue, 08 Sep 2009 18:30:35 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 http://bunkbrain.wordpress.com/2006/03/28/poem/#comment-3 mr bartlett Wed, 05 Apr 2006 01:13:00 +0000 https://bunkbrain.wordpress.com/2006/03/28/poem/#comment-3 Good work Leroy, if a bit on the short side. You use language well though and have created some nice images. However, the poem is supposed to be free verse (that means it shouldn't rhyme) and is supposed to tell a story of change. This poem does hint at some kind of story, but I would have liked to see a bit more detail. With a bit more work, I think you could have done very well at this. Good work Leroy, if a bit on the short side. You use language well though and have created some nice images. However, the poem is supposed to be free verse (that means it shouldn’t rhyme) and is supposed to tell a story of change. This poem does hint at some kind of story, but I would have liked to see a bit more detail. With a bit more work, I think you could have done very well at this.

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